Moriah Leila

It is decent, but I wish you had put more emotion into this poem. Quarrelling with a friend is never a tidy business, but that is what your poem implies. ...

*Tear* This is a very powerful poem. I am like Mr.Knightley, I wish you had expanded a little bit more. Why is the Mom leaving? How old is the little ...

While I do think you did a good job with this poem, I wanted to know more about Serena and less about what she did. I don't know why, but ...

Wow, I really liked this poem. It was very well-written and I enjoyed the story in the poem. Was it intentional for you not to capitalise letters? I'm not sure ...

I'm not sure if this is where this poem belongs. For some reason I've been inspired to write poetry as of late, and this is the only one I felt ...

While I get what you are trying to say, this poem comes off as one of two things: 1.) A prayer 2.) A sermon I think you were trying to ...

Well, even though I've been a member for almost a year and a half, I don't think I've realized the full potential of YWS until the past few months. I ...

Very original, even though the title says otherwise. It was actually the title that caught my eye. While it was obviously the random musings of a frustrated poet, I think ...

Hi there! Nice poems. I really enjoyed the first one, I thought it very well-written and had beautiful imagery. The stifled heat reminded me of a time that I was ...

I liked this poem. The structure is so easy to follow and even easier to critique. You did a very good job with your adjectives, although I do wish you ...

Wow, this is really great writing. I love how you don't come right out and say that she is playing the piano. And how her music was not only the ...

I really like the idea behind this poem. It reminds me of when my great-grandmother died, and how I just wanted to be alone to cope with her death. I ...

Very good. I didn't see the ending coming at all. My only critique is about the punctuation. Normally you punctuate poetry just like you do prose. If you wrote this ...

I have to agree with the other two that this poem has no cohesive theme. What is the poem about exactly? Maybe you could change some of the lines so ...

I thought you did a really good job on this poem. You put in enough emotion and detail, while still making it clear what the theme was. But you didn't ...